. You do 'slice of life' stories so well: they're always in character, with a nice touch of emotion and sentiment but not overdone, and they just feel good.
Thanks so much; that's exactly what I'm going for.
Enjoyed seeing the brothers again, especially Marcus.
<g> I was a bit surprised. I had planned to mention Marcus only in passing -- he was going to remain 'offstage', and we'd know about his actions only from Jim's report about getting the mask fixed -- but Marcus had other ideas. I was a bit worried, since I've never written him before, but he just rambled on in his gentle way and let me follow along.
What prompted you to use a water main break? The aftermath seemed a bit more like an earthquake (which may have been what prompted the break).
I actually started with an earthquake. But it was getting way involved -- Jim sensing it before it happened, and then warning the city -- and the only point was to break Blair's mask. And then the Japan quake happened, and it just seemed crass to use an earthquake scenario so frivolously. But I needed something to knock the mask off the wall, so the water main break seemed suitable. I imagine it would have felt like an earthquake for people who lived close, but the effects would be far less reaching.
I'm kind of constrained; I want physical results without anyone being hurt, so things are a bit unrealistic. But, since the point of the story is Jim and Blair, I figure the readers can hand-wave such things away.
Anyway, thanks for the feedback; I really appreciate it. .
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You do 'slice of life' stories so well: they're always in character, with a nice touch of emotion and sentiment but not overdone, and they just feel good.
Thanks so much; that's exactly what I'm going for.
Enjoyed seeing the brothers again, especially Marcus.
<g> I was a bit surprised. I had planned to mention Marcus only in passing -- he was going to remain 'offstage', and we'd know about his actions only from Jim's report about getting the mask fixed -- but Marcus had other ideas. I was a bit worried, since I've never written him before, but he just rambled on in his gentle way and let me follow along.
What prompted you to use a water main break? The aftermath seemed a bit more like an earthquake (which may have been what prompted the break).
I actually started with an earthquake. But it was getting way involved -- Jim sensing it before it happened, and then warning the city -- and the only point was to break Blair's mask. And then the Japan quake happened, and it just seemed crass to use an earthquake scenario so frivolously. But I needed something to knock the mask off the wall, so the water main break seemed suitable. I imagine it would have felt like an earthquake for people who lived close, but the effects would be far less reaching.
I'm kind of constrained; I want physical results without anyone being hurt, so things are a bit unrealistic. But, since the point of the story is Jim and Blair, I figure the readers can hand-wave such things away.
Anyway, thanks for the feedback; I really appreciate it.
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